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The topic is (The Evolution of Wooden To Steel Ships; The USS Dolphin)

The references are below you can add two more

Berube, C. (2021). Sea Shepherd: The Evolution of an Eco-Vigilante to Legitimized Maritime Capacity Builder.

Biesman-Simons, C. J. (2019). Space, Power, Policy, and the Creation of the “Illegal” Migrant at the United States Boundary with Mexico.

Firth, S. (2019). The Military and Security in the Pacific Islands Past and Present. In Guns & Roses: Comparative Civil-Military Relations in the Changing Security Environment (pp. 137-152). Palgrave Macmillan, Singapore.

Hanlon, W. W. (2017). Evolving Comparative Advantage in International Shipbuilding During the Transition from Wood to Steel. Mimeo.

The paper have to look like the example I uploaded ( IT HAVE TO FOLLOW JUST LIKE THE EXAMPLE OR ELSE I WILL FAIL THIS CLASS)

IN THE OUTLINE DOCUMENT ATTACH IS THE INPUTS FROM THE PROFESSOR.

Three Part Outline: The Evolution of Wooden To Steel Ships; The USS Dolphin. Comment by AmyShirelle Santos: Font incorrect on whole document.
You have several grammatical errors, capitalization, etc..etc..

I. INTRODUCTION

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Attention Getter: Before the industrial era in the 19th century, the US navy made wooden ships. The industrial revolution introduced mass production of steel manufacturing which transformed the boat manufacturing industry from wooden ships to steel-plate ships mainly the USS Dolphin. Comment by AmyShirelle Santos: GRAMMAR: In APA style, “United States” should always be spelled out when it is used as a noun or location. Example: In the United States, 67% reported this experience. United States can be abbreviated as “U.S.” when it is used as an adjective.
GRAMMAR (naval): For first reference always include USS, the ship’s name, and the hull number; do not include hyphen in the hull number. There is no hyphen in the hull number. On second reference, use only the ship’s name or references as “the ship”. Do not use “the” in front of a ship’s name: “USS San Jose” not “the USS San Jose”. Use “the” before the ship type: “the aircraft carrier USS George H.W. Bush (CVN 77). Do not use ship’s nicknames. Use correct titles. Do not write ship’s name in all caps: “USS San Jose” not “USS SAN JOSE”. U.S. Style Guide, p. 12.

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Motivation Sentence: Senior enlisted leaders should know the history behind the evolution from wooden to steel ships, because they are caretakers of military history and tradition. The industrial era introduced the evolution which changed the ship manufacturing industry transitioning from wood to iron and later to steel-plate ship Comment by AmyShirelle Santos: Good. Comment by AmyShirelle Santos: Remove this.
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Overview Sentence (State Main Points:
This essay will cover the background of wooden to steel ships, their evolution and the importance to military culture and the 38 years’ career of the USS dolphin. Comment by AmyShirelle Santos: GRAMMAR: Use comma between elements (including before and and or) in a series of three or more items; APA 7th Ed. pp. 155-156.
II. BODY
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Main point 1: Background
· Modern-day ship development is linked to the industrial revolution results of 1840 to 1950.
· This period is characterized by steam engine progression and steamship technology development (Berube,2021).

· US Navy adopted changes in developing the USS Dolphin, which served for 38 years.

Transition sentence from MP1 to MP2: Knowledge of the background of the Wooden to steel ships lays the foundation for its evolution. Comment by AmyShirelle Santos: Good.
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Main point 2: The USS Dolphin was developed as a deep-diving experimental machine known as a Submarine, used by the US navy to research submarine activities and other navy activities

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The evolution of wooden to steel ships mainly the USS Dolphin signify its importance to military culture. Comment by AmyShirelle Santos: Read this aloud to ensure this is the flow you want.
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Main point 3: Importance
· The USS Dolphin was designed for easy modification internally and externally to allow superior military and civilian research equipment (Biesman-Simons, 2017).

III.CONCLUSION

A. Summary Sentence (Re-state Main Points):
This essay covered the background of wooden to steel ships, their evolution and their importance to military culture. Comment by AmyShirelle Santos: Good.
B. Re-motivation Sentence:
Senior enlisted leaders should know the history behind the evolution from wooden to steel ships, because they are caretakers of military history and tradition. Comment by AmyShirelle Santos: Good.
C. The industrial era introduced the evolution which changed the ship manufacturing industry transitioning from wood to iron and later to steel-plate ships. The USS Dolphin did significant research for both the navy and civilians and was later decommissioned in 2017. Comment by AmyShirelle Santos: If you are going to cover this info in the body of your paper, then do no use it as a closing.
STRUCTURE: Closing should consist of one or two statements – of either a thought-provoking idea or a quote from someone of importance of expertise that supports the information outlined; SEA Effective Writing Guide p. 13.

Comment by AmyShirelle Santos: Formatting errors.
References

Berube, C. (2021). Sea Shepherd: The Evolution of an Eco-Vigilante to Legitimized Maritime Capacity Builder.
Biesman-Simons, C. J. (2019). Space, Power, Policy, and the Creation of the “Illegal” Migrant at the United States Boundary with Mexico.
Firth, S. (2019). The Military and Security in the Pacific Islands Past and Present. In Guns & Roses: Comparative Civil-Military Relations in the Changing Security Environment (pp. 137-152). Palgrave Macmillan, Singapore.
Hanlon, W. W. (2017). Evolving Comparative Advantage in International Shipbuilding During the Transition from Wood to Steel. Mimeo.

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The Value is in the Eye of the Beholder

Suzanne Shipdriver

Senior Enlisted Academy

Class 198 Orange Group

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The Value is in the Eye of the Beholder

A coin of zero monetary value was worth the life of a man. Senior enlisted leaders should

know the history behind military challenge coins, because they are the caretakers of military

history and tradition. This essay will cover the background of the coin, their evolution, and their

importance to military culture.

Background

There are no official records detailing the history of military challenge coins, but as

Emily Baumgaertner (2018) indicated in her article in The New York Times, there is one

common tale that most people consider true. That narrative states that during World War I

(WWI), a wealthy lieutenant presented his flying unit with solid bronze medallions that he paid

to have struck with the squadron’s insignia. At the time, there was no meaning or value to these

medallions other than a kind gesture from a wealthy lieutenant. One of those medallions given to

a young pilot ended up in a leather pouch, which he wore around his neck from that point

forward. After sustaining damage to his aircraft, the young pilot lands behind enemy lines

leading to immediate capture and detention by German forces. To deter escape, the German

captors stripped the young pilot of all his possessions, with the exception of the leather pouch

(Baumgaertner, 2018).

The tale goes on to claim that one night during an attack on the Germans, the young pilot

escaped and eluded the Germans by acquiring and wearing civilian clothing. He succeeded in

making it to an allied French outpost, but found himself facing execution because the French

thought him to be a saboteur. To the pilot’s misfortune, that particular outpost had been victim to

frequent attempts by saboteurs dressed as civilians hoping to harm the French. Due to lack of

proper identification to show allegiance, the French went into execution mode as a means of self-

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defense (Baumgaertner, 2018). Remembering that he had the stamped medallion bearing the

insignia of his squadron, he presented it as proof of his allegiance and as luck would have it, one

of the Frenchmen recognized the insignia granting him more time to confirm his identity

resulting in the cancellation of his execution. This event led to the tradition of every member in

that squadron carrying their medallion, which was now dubbed a coin, at all times (Challenge

Coin History and Rules of the Coin, n.d.). Knowledge of the background of the challenge coins

lays the foundation for their evolution.

Evolution

The coin that saved the young pilot in WWI was a piece of scrap bronze with a stamp on

it. Military historian Kevin Santiago (2019) notes that today’s coins are far more elaborate and

intricate and have evolved into more than just a stamped piece of metal. He attributes the change

to the advances in manufacturing techniques that have also evolved over the years (Santiago,

2019). They are not just round like a typical coin or the medallion that the young WWI pilot

handed out; some are in the shape of ships, aircraft, people, and even characters from cartoons

and movies. Modern manufacturing techniques enable the ability to display 3-dimensional

images similar to the detail found on actual currency. “Virtually every element of a custom coin

now can be tailored to suit individual preferences” (Santiago, 2019, Challenge Coins Today

Section, para. 2). The evolution of military challenge coins from pieces of scrap metal to

intricate pieces signify their importance to military culture.

Importance

Challenge coins are popular across all branches of the military amongst all their

communities and ranks (Santiago, 2019). In the U.S. Navy, unit commanders can use

appropriated funds to purchase command coins that they present or award at their discretion as

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per Naval Administrative Message 184/14 (Howard, 2014). These coins are given or awarded for

any action deemed worthy by the bearer of the coins. Some examples include exceptional

performance, specific achievement, and outstanding physical fitness scores. It is a small item

generally presented within a handshake, but since the recipient does not expect it and due to the

personal nature of the coin, it is a very generous and personal gesture. According to the Chief

Petty Officers Guide, using one’s reward power is a proven way to show recognition of hard

work and a motivator to those not performing at their full potential (Kingsbury, 2018).

These coins also serve to promote unity and esprit de corps. According to Tracy English,

a historian at the Air Force’s 37th Training Wing at Joint Base San Antonio-Lackland in Texas,

these coins have always been about morale and commitment (Baumgaertner, 2018). From their

beginning, these coins have served as proof of the bearer’s allegiance. Sometimes they are

exchanged or traded with members of different groups or presented to other groups as a sign of

appreciation, or maybe to mark an occasion. Coins from different Chief Messes are on display in

almost any Mess across the Navy, but still communicate pride and comradery. The relevancy of

challenge coins in today’s military is evident on a daily basis in large part due to the history of

the coins (Santiago, 2019).

This essay covered the background of military challenge coins, their evolution, and their

importance to military culture. Senior enlisted leaders should know the history behind military

challenge coins, because they are the caretakers of military history and tradition. A stamped

piece of non-precious metal became the most valuable thing to a man facing death; allowing it to

lose its worth now would be tragic.

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References

Baumgaertner, E. (2018, April 11). Morale, allegiance and drinking: How military challenge

coins evolved and spread. The New York Times.

Challenge Coin History and Rules of the Coin. (n.d.).

http://www.goatlocker.org/resources/cpo/history/cpocoin.htm

Howard, M. (2014). Judicious use of command coins and presentation items. (NAVADMIN

184/14). Washington, DC: Vice Chief of Naval Operations.

http://www.public.navy.mil/bupersnpc/reference/messages/Documents/NAVADMINS/N

AV2014/NAV14184.txt

Kingsbury, P. A. (2018). Chief Petty Officer’s Guide (2nd ed.). Annapolis, MD: Naval Institute

Press.

Santiago, K. (2019, April 12). Military challenge coins a lasting tradition within the armed

services. https://www.thebalancecareers.com/military-challenge-coins-3354113

http://www.goatlocker.org/resources/cpo/history/cpocoin.htm

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https://www.thebalancecareers.com/military-challenge-coins-3354113

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