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SHORT FICTION ESSAY 2 -ANNOTATION.
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Short Fiction Essay 2 -Annotation
Marvin Hughes
Jeffery Fuller
English
3-14-21
In Tobias Wolff’s “Beautiful Girl” the author has shown many themes in the story but the theme of love is mainly explained and emphasized. The book reflects the world in terms of love how people get engaged. The characters for this book are, the author Tobias Wolff giving about his story since he was fifteen years old, some boys were in the author’s class. He says “I didn’t dare to look down, but the bleached faces of the other boys told me just how bad it was.” The boys are playing the important role in the story because, they are trying to make the story true in the mind of the reader as he or she could relate to characters like those back in school (Bechdel, 2007). Also, there are girls in the story who were who the authors said, “The girls around me were coming into glorious bloom, and my way of pretending not to be in awe of them was to act as if we were still kids.”
The author talks about Terry who was his friend and he had a cousin by the name of Patty who could never leave her friend. All characters are playing the role of bringing theme love which is in the whole book. The author says that they could meet Terry’s cousin Patty and Patty could come with her fried every Saturday night at Admiral Theatre.
Tobias the author could seat together with Patty and Terry could seats together with Patty’s friend. However, the author used an element of humor where he says, “Patty and I sat in the back and made out for two hours without exchanging a word, while Terry did the same with Patty’s friend.” The sense of humor is clear here because according to how both boys and both girls arranged themselves, it shows there was in love but they had childish in them.
The theme of love is also expressed in the story where the author is illustrating his new school. He says, “When we finally got there, we found girls, all right, but the pretty ones in our class got picked off by juniors and seniors, and the older ones wouldn’t look at us.” The story shows how those people who have a power take all good with them. Those who are in power will never let those who don’t have to gain something. That’s why the author is saying they were left without girls since pretty ones, were taken by seniors. Also, there is irony in the statement. There is no way juniors could take the pretty once from agemates of the author.
Moreover, the theme of suffering is expressed in the story. The story started by where the author cut off the last joint of his ring finger. He went through suffering even though he was pretending to have bad feelings. Also, the author wakes up one afternoon with “two-thirds of a finger and a bandage as a big as a boxing glove to find a beautiful girl smiling down at me from the foot of my bed.” At this time the author was in the hospital and that shows them suffering.
The author shows an element of the story within a story. The fact that Tobias was telling about life in new high school, he started another story about how he woke up and find Joelle. Joelle is another character who is the main in the story (Helmbold, 2012). The title of the story is named representing her. she is the beautiful lady who Tobias is talking about. Apart from being the main character in the story, Joelle is the mirror of the theme of love in the whole story.
When the author was in the hospital, he woke up and find a beautiful girl smiling at him. It is love that made Joelle go and check on Tobias in such a situation. She was not alone. Joelle Daddy was with her in the hospital to check on her fiancé Tobias. The theme of love is clearly expressed y Tobias when he said, “That’s my girl, Joelle,” he seems to be so happy. Also, the author uses imagery to explain Joelle’s picture in such a situation. “She had dark-red hair held back from her high brow by pink barrettes. Her skin was pale, pearly. with a few freckles across her cheeks. Her eyes were green, her lips red with lipstick.”
Joelle is in much love with Tobias that why she could not come to see him once but she come twice. Tobias had an unfair grade. This means that Tobias was having unfairness with another girl and that is why they are arguing. Joelle wrote her telephone number in the book and give it to Tobias. Tobias was embarrassed by how courageous is Joelle that she did that in front of her father. This also shows that love sometimes goes together with courage. It is sometimes awkward for a young girl like Joelle to show love in front of her father.
The theme of love is portrayed well at the end of this story. The author said, “I called Joelle every day.” She was also in so much love with Tobias since the author said “She wanted me to come to visit, and on Saturday I hitchhiked the many miles to her house.” Joelle was very eagerly waiting for Tobias every time she was alive.
when Tobias and Joelle meet, they were making love and hike together. “She took my hand, and we climbed the grassy hill behind the house, and sat on a fallen tree.” The author said that Joelle wanted him to kiss her. In conclusion, the theme of love dominates all other themes in the story.
References.
Bechdel, A. (2007). Fun home: A family tragicomic. Houghton Mifflin Harcourt.
Helmbold, A. (2012). The Sacred in the Context of the Everyday: Finding Faith in the Fiction of Tobias Wolff. INTÉ GRITÉ, 7.
