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How to Write a Thesis Statement

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video on writing the thesis statement

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Read T.C. Boyle’s short story, 

“Greasy Lake”

Write a specific, focused, thesis statement in

complex sentence form (dependent + independent clause

. that others in class might not agree with and that comes to a conclusion about how the narrator or Digby or Jeff’s behavior illustrates a point Orenstein makes about young men in her article,

“The Miseducation of the American Boy.”

This assignment requires you to submit only one sentence. Type your thesis statement in the text box.  

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So what is a thesis statement, anyway?

A thesis statement is the point of your essay or response; it is why you are writing. It is a sentence that
usually comes at the end of the introduction. Here is a visual representation of the organization of an academic
essay:

The rest of the paper, the body of the essay, gathers and organizes evidence that will persuade the reader of
the logic of your interpretation. An essay with a clear thesis will be focused and not stray off-topic.

Be sure your thesis statement does the following:

 Your thesis statement should be specific—it should cover only what you will discuss in your paper and
should be supported with specific evidence (in the paragraphs of the body of your essay).

 Your thesis should directly answer the question asked of you; it is not the topic itself. In other words, the
topic of your history essay might be the Vietnam War. Your thesis must, then, offer a way to understand
the war.

 Because your thesis must offer a way to understand the topic, it should make a claim that others might
not agree with. For instance, regarding the topic of the Vietnam War, your thesis might be, “The Vietnam
War might have been prevented had America itself not supported a number of military dictatorships
before the Viet Cong rose to power.”

using evidence (in the form of embedded quotations) for support.

INTRODUCTION: introduce the topic generally,
then focus with the specific

THESIS STATEMENT

Paragraphs should all reinforce the thesis statement

and prove true the claims made in the thesis statement

CONCLUSION: tie together what you have
claimed in your thesis and proven in the body

of your essay and leave you reader with
something to think about

How to Tell a Strong from a Weak Thesis Statement.

1. A strong thesis statement is debatable, reaching a conclusion with which others might not agree.

Remember that your thesis needs to show your conclusions about a subject. For example, if you are writing a
paper for a class on fitness, you might be asked to choose a popular weight-loss product to evaluate. Notice the
marked difference in the following two statements:

 There are some negative and positive health aspects to the LessWeight Herb Tea Supplement. This is a
weak thesis statement. First, it fails to take a stand. Second, the phrase negative and positive aspects is
vague.

 Because LessWeight Herb Tea Supplement promotes rapid weight loss that results in the loss of
muscle and lean body mass, it poses potential health risks to consumers. This is a strong thesis
because it is debatable, as those who have lost weight without side effects from the supplement would
disagree.

2. A strong thesis statement justifies discussion.

Your thesis should indicate the point of the discussion; it should not be a mere observation. For an essay on
photojournalism, note the improvement in the second of the following two thesis statements:

 The photographs of Bosnian genocide victims were graphic and offensive to many viewers. This is a
weak thesis statement because, while true, it merely states an observation.

 Although controversial when they were first published, the circulation of photographs of the Bosnian
genocide victims who were raped and murdered was necessary to communicate the horrors of that
war to future generations. This is a strong thesis because it is controversial and generates strong reaction
and discussion. Readers will be interested in reading the rest of the essay to see how you support your
point.

3. A strong thesis statement is specific.

A thesis statement should show exactly what your paper will be about and will help you keep your paper to a
manageable topic. For example, notice the difference in specificity between the two thesis statements on an
assignment on world hunger:

 World hunger has many causes and effects. This is a weak thesis statement for two major reasons. First,
world hunger is much too broad a topic. Second, many causes and effects is vague. You should be able to
identify specific causes and effects.

 Hunger persists in Uganda because jobs are scarce and farming in the infertile soil is rarely
profitable. This is a strong thesis statement because it narrows the subject to a more specific and
manageable topic, and it also identifies the specific causes for the existence of hunger in that part of the
world.

Information borrowed from: Indiana University Writing Center and Purdue U OWL.