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Argumentative Essay
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STUDENT PAPERS
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Argumentative Essay
ORIGINALITY REPORT
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Argumentative Essay
GRADEMARK REPORT
GENERAL COMMENTS
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10. Recycled
Unfortunately, your essay is reworded from a paper that was already submitted to Straighterline or
another university. This is a type of plagiarism called recycling, which is unacceptable by
Straighterline policy. Therefore, you will need to completely rewrite a new essay with a new topic in
order for a submission under this assignment to be accepted and graded.
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RUBRIC: ENG101 V6:ARGUMENTATIVE FINAL
THESIS (20%)
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SUPPORT & DEV (15%)
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Thesis, central idea, audience, purpose, digressions
Thesis or potential thesis is neither present in any portion of the essay, nor is it implied in
any manner. Thesis may be present but incorrect for the assignment’s
objectives/approach. Thesis may be present but the submission overall fails to meet most
assignment objectives (such as the essay is only a paragraph) that determining the thesis’
viability is problematic.
Lacks an identifiable thesis. Limited or no awareness of audience and purpose. Readers
cannot discern the essay’s central idea.
Thesis was attempted but unclear and/or inconsistently addressed. Reveals limited
awareness of audience and purpose. Central idea either lacking or inconsistently
addressed.
Thesis is identifiable, but perhaps too narrow, too broad, or otherwise problematic.
Awareness of audience may be adequate but inconsistent. Central idea is perhaps too
general and supported by irrelevant examples.
Thesis is established and is consistently addressed throughout most of the paper.
Awareness of audience is sufficient. Central idea is clear and maintained in most of the
essay.
Thesis is clearly established and maintained throughout the entire paper. Paper
demonstrates a sophisticated awareness of audience and purpose. Central idea/focus
maintained throughout.
0 / 5
Thesis support, thesis development, use of examples, logic, and reason
Support is more than lacking, such that it is insufficient for review (assignment does not
meet length requirements). Body paragraphs may be very limited in original material for
evaluation due to too much borrowed information and a problematic similarity report which
qualifies the paper for an account hold and “similarity match: low” QuickMark.
No support of thesis with relevant facts, examples, reasons, or evidence. No topic
development. Little-to-no argument is present. Topic development is flawed or non-
existent.
Support is minimal, logically flawed, and/or inaccurate. At least two arguments are
present, but counterargument and refutation may be weak or missing. Topic development
may have been attempted, but does not form conclusions and/or fails to exhibit clear
reasoning. The body paragraphs have an insufficient mix of cited quotes, paraphrases,
and summaries.
More support is needed. Some examples may be vague. More development needed for
supporting reasons or evidence. Some irrelevant support may be present, but most
evidence supports thesis. The body paragraphs have an adequate mix of cited quotes,
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COHERENCE (10%)
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LANGUAGE (15%)
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paraphrases, and summaries.
Support is sufficient but perhaps flawed in some way. At least three strong arguments, a
counterargument, and a refutation are present. Examples are sufficient. Thesis is
supported and developed in most paragraphs. The body paragraphs have a sufficient mix
of cited quotes, paraphrases, and summaries.
Essay completely supports the thesis with logical arrangement of evidence. At least three
strong arguments, a counterargument, and a refutation are present. All assertions are
supported and relate to thesis. The body paragraphs have an exceptional mix of cited
quotes, paraphrases, and summaries.
0 / 5
Introduction, conclusion, body paragraphs, transitions, topic sentences
Two or more major organizational elements are missing, such as an introduction and
conclusion. Essay be one long paragraph with no discernible separation of ideas.
No clear introduction, body, or conclusion. Little-to-no transitions. Demonstrates little-to-no
understanding of organization. Many sentences within paragraphs do not relate to each
other and/or the paragraph’s topic. May contain no discernible topic sentences.
Introduction, body, and conclusion attempted but problematic. Few transitions. Perhaps
numerous digressions. Mostly missing or problematic topic sentences. Demonstrates little
understanding of organization.
Identifiable introduction, body, and conclusion; yet one significant weakness is present:
undeveloped introduction, undeveloped conclusion, illogical paragraph order. Adequate
transitions, perhaps some digressions. Some paragraphs may lack clear topic sentences.
Demonstrates basic understanding of organization.
Clear introduction, body, and conclusion although improvements could be made. Most
paragraphs have clear topic sentences. Essay establishes a clear plan of development.
Transitions are clear throughout most of the paper. Demonstrates good understanding of
organization.
Clear and effective introduction, body, and conclusion: Introduction establishes the
essay’s main idea, and conclusion summarizes thesis and main ideas without merely
copying and pasting from the introduction. Clear and effective transitions are present
throughout the paper. Demonstrates excellent understanding of organization.
0 / 5
Word choice, repetition, redundancy, awkwardness, article misuse, wrong word form (their/there, etc.),
typos/misspellings, vocabulary
May contain more than 8 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness.
May contain more than 8 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience.
Fails to demonstrate clarity in most sentences throughout the paper. The lack of
lucidity makes it difficult for the reader to determine the paper’s focus.
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GRAMMAR (10%)
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POINTS
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PUNCTUATION (10%)
POINTS
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POINTS
May contain more than 6 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness.
May contain more than 6 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience.
Fails to demonstrate competent language use; sentences and vocabulary are
inappropriate, facile, and/or incoherent.
May contain 6 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness.
May
contain 6 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience.
Contains
repetitive, incorrect, and/or insufficient sentence structure and/or limited vocabulary.
May contain 4 – 5 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness.
May contain 2 – 3 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience.
Demonstrates competency with language use but sentence constructions and
vocabulary may be limited or repetitive.
May contain 2 – 3 errors in word choice, wordiness, redundancy, or awkwardness.
May contain 2 – 3 errors in inappropriate language for academic audience.
Demonstrates sufficient knowledge and skill with varied sentence construction and
vocabulary. Unnecessary repetition is minor.
May contain 1 error in inappropriate language for academic audience.
Demonstrates
sophisticated knowledge and skill with varied and complex sentence construction and
vocabulary. Little-to-no unnecessary repetition.
0 / 5
Fragments, subject-verb agreement, verb tense errors, verb form errors, run-ons, pronoun agreement
Contains more than 7 different grammar errors.
The identical 5+ errors may be
repeated throughout.
Contains more than 5 different punctuation/capitalization errors.
The identical 3 – 4
errors may be repeated throughout.
Contains 4 – 5 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The identical 2 – 3 errors may be
repeated throughout.
Contains 2 – 3 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The identical 1 – 2 errors may be
repeated throughout.
Contains 1 punctuation/capitalization error, which may be repeated throughout the essay.
Contains either no punctuation/capitalization error, or 1 – 2 different errors with no
repetition.
0 / 5
Comma errors, comma splices, apostrophe errors, capitalization errors, semicolon errors, colon errors
Contains more than 7 different punctuation/capitalization errors.
The identical 5+
errors may be repeated throughout.
Contains more than 5 different punctuation/capitalization errors.
The identical 3 – 4
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FORMAT (10%)
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RESEARCH (10%)
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errors may be repeated throughout.
Contains 4 – 5 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The identical 2 – 3 errors may be
repeated throughout.
Contains 2 – 3 different punctuation/capitalization errors. The identical 1 – 2 errors may be
repeated throughout.
Contains 1 punctuation/capitalization error, which may be repeated throughout the essay.
Contains either no punctuation/capitalization error, or 1 – 2 different errors with no
repetition.
0 / 5
heading, title, margins, spacing, length*, underlined thesis *Length for argumentative is 750 words minimum
Format or word minimum is completely lacking. Formatting may be missing five or more
elements (either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, and/or
thesis not underlined). Essay is severely underdeveloped, such that it includes only a
paragraph or two.
Doesn’t meet formatting requirements: Formatting may be missing four or more elements
(either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, or thesis not
underlined). Length may not meet minimum requirements.
Doesn’t meet most formatting requirements: Formatting may be missing three elements
(either no title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, or thesis not
underlined). Length may not meet minimum requirements.
Meets some formatting requirements: Formatting may be missing two elements (either no
title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, or thesis not underlined).
Length may not meet minimum requirements (an essay that does not meet length
minimum will score no higher than 3 in this category)
Contains 1 punctuation/capitalization error, which may be repeated throughout the essay.
Meets most formatting requirements: Formatting may be missing one element (either no
title, incomplete heading, inappropriate spacing or margins, or thesis not underlined).
Length meets minimum requirements of 750 words.
Meets all requirements. Formatting is appropriate in terms of heading, title, margins,
spacing, underlining thesis. Length meets minimum requirements of 750 words.
0 / 5
Source minimums, incorporation of sources (including use of signal phrases), use of research to argue topic,
MLA in-text quote formatting, Works Cited list This paper requires at least three sources.
Sources are neither present on the Works Cited page nor employed in the paper. No
attempt or implied intention to use sources. At least seven different errors in documenting
sources. Similarity report may present potential plagiarism concerns, so much so that
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grading the paper is acceptable but the paper must be placed on an account hold due to
qualifying for the “similarity match: low” QuickMark.
Source minimum requirements are not met. Research is insufficient, irrelevant, or
inadequate. Sources are not incorporated at all, or are done very poorly. Five or more
errors in documenting sources using MLA style may be present. Works Cited page either
omitted or formatted very poorly. It may be difficult or impossible to discern which sources
are in the list.
Source minimum requirements may not be met (Note: If source minimum is not met, the
essay will score no higher than 2 in this category). Research is superficial and/or sources
are incorporated poorly. No more than four different errors in documenting sources using
MLA style may be present. These identical errors may be repeated. Works Cited page
may contain significant formatting errors, and some sources may be omitted from the list.
Source minimum requirements (three credible sources) are met. Research may be
superficial, sources may be poorly incorporated. No more than three different errors in
documenting sources using MLA style may be present. These identical errors may be
repeated. Works Cited page may contain significant formatting errors, but all sources are
listed.
Source minimum requirements (three credible sources) are met. Fairly thorough research
with mostly effective use of sources. No more than two different errors in documenting
sources using MLA style. These identical two errors may be repeated. Works Cited page
may contain minor formatting errors, but all sources are clearly listed.
Source minimum requirements (three credible sources) are met. Thoroughly researches
the topic, uses sources effectively. No more than one different error in documenting
sources using MLA style. This identical error may be repeated. Works Cited page may
contain minor formatting errors, but all sources are clearly listed.
