This essay should be done in two forms

1. First draft : That is due in 10 hours and should be 3 pages long.

2. Final Draft : The main essay and the final that should include everything due on  9th March.

-THIS IS AN ARGUMENTATIVE research paper. So, follow the instructions strictly.

The instructions are attached below in the word.

-The resources and articles (3 articles are attached below)that should be worked on are attached below. No out sources than given below.

– NO PLAGIARISM

-MLA FORMAT.

Lissette Gonzalez

Peer Response for Rinchin Lama’s “Why Homosexuals need to be Legalized to Adopt Children”

In my opinion, the strength of your paper is the emotional appeal it contains. It is very saddening that many children are thrown into the foster care system with no one to protect or love them. The way you explained how homosexuals could be a solution to this problem flowed smoothly. The thesis is, “Adoption to the gays and lesbians should be legalized because it can help in building a positive psychological effect on the children. Another reason why lesbianism should be legalized is that it will help different nations to become more open-minded and providing the gays and lesbians the happiness experienced by other people with children”

Your reasons supporting your claim are strong. I think the thesis would be even stronger if you combined your reasons into one sentence not two. The paper is clearly persuasive and contains very good arguments. I see no obvious errors with the formatting. The sources have a hanging indents and are in ABC order.

The author uses quotes from the sources. Although, it seems that you forgot to place quotation marks on one of your sentences in the 3rd paragraph.

Could you expand the reasons adoption by homosexuals cause positive psychological impact on children? It would be great to have a few examples of the positivity.

For the most part, I think your paper is great! Just needs a few small adjustments.

Imranullah Hesarnaiee

Peer response to Rinchin Lama:” why Homosexuals need to be legalized to adopt children”.

A. To be honest, the topic is very interesting. It is my first time that I see and read about this topic. I really enjoyed from reading this topic. I never read anything about Homosexuals, but this topic was amazing for me.

B. “Currently, no empirical evidence demonstrates that living with a gay or lesbian parent has any significant negative effects on children”. The topic is very clear, and the introduction tells the reader what to expect from the paper. the argument is good as well.

C. in this paper the writer argues very good and beside the writer give very good examples. The argument is logical. Totally agree with the arguments and the examples.

D. This paper is MLA formatting. The pager number are correct. I don’t see any obvious errors in the formatting and beside that the writer didn’t use the word “you” in the paper. The entries are in ABC orders.

E. The author used direct quotes in the essay and beside this the author explained in his/her own language that make the essay more interesting. The writer also has a good balance of information through out the paper. the source is creditable and cited in page entries and is on MLA format guideline.

F. The whole essay was very clear. Nothing was confusing for me. I really enjoyed from reading this topic. But I have a question from the writer. I myself don’t have any problem with gay or lesbians. I will really support them, but the question is. If a gay couple adopt a child how can they take of them? I think lesbian can take care of the children efficiently than gay couple.

G. I dot have any specific suggestions in this essay. Everything is good. I don’t see any serious problems in issues, tone, mood or clarity. Everything is clear and interesting.