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Three Part Outline:
The History of the Manning the Rails

I. Introduction

A.
Attention Getter

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Now man the rails, Now man the rails. All Sailors participating in manning the rails muster in your respective locations. Comment by Lourdie Powell: Revise attention getter in 3rd person. Comment by Lourdie Powell: No good because this is 2nd person.
Write the essay in third person (i.e., use he, she, they, them, his, her instead of I, me, my, we, our, us, let’s, you, your…).
See PE – page 2 – para 5.

B.

Motivation Sentence

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Senior Enlisted Leaders must have a sense of heritage and a thorough understanding of naval customs and traditions to better inform their Sailors. Comment by Lourdie Powell: Motivation statement meets 3PC. Good job!

C.
Overview Sentence:
This essay will cover the history historical background of Manning the Rails, its evolution, and its importance to military culture. Comment by Lourdie Powell: Overview almost perfect. Do not forget to include all three main points in the sentence (background, evolution, and importance).

II. Body

A.
Main point 1:
Background Comment by Lourdie Powell: Correct MP1 heading.

· The origin of the tradition and its importance to naval history.

Transition sentence from MP1 to MP2

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Understanding the origin background of the custom of manning the yards lay a firm foundation for understanding the evolution of manning the rail. Comment by Lourdie Powell: Transition sentence is 50% correct. Remember to include the headings for MP1 and MP2 in that sentence. Good effort.

B.
Main point 2:
Evolution Comment by Lourdie Powell: Correct MP2 heading.

· First known as manning the yards

· Adopted by the U.S. Navy

· Manning the rail for the USS Arizona

Transition sentence from MP2 to MP3

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The evolution of manning the rail from manning the yards to the adoption by the U.S. Navy as a form of passing honors is known as a military customs and traditions. Comment by Lourdie Powell: Again, this transition sentence is 50% correct. MP3 (importance) is missing here. See the below example:
The evolution of the manning of the rails leads to a discussion of its importance to military customs and traditions.

C.
Main point 3:
Importance Comment by Lourdie Powell: Correct MP3 heading.

· Honor to render to the President of the United States

· When the ship is entering and leaving a port (less formal)

· Honor the USS Arizona Memorial

III. Conclusion

A.
Summary Sentence

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This essay covered the background of manning the rails, its evolution, and its importance to our military culture. Comment by Lourdie Powell: Sis, you almost got it. Revise the summary sentence in the 3rd person and you should be good to go. Comment by Lourdie Powell: No good because this is 1st person (plural).
Write the essay in third person (i.e., use he, she, they, them, his, her instead of I, me, my, we, our, us, let’s, you, your…).
See PE – page 2 – para 5.

B.
Re-motivation Sentence

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Senior Enlisted Leaders must understand the importance of Naval naval customs and traditions to better inform their Sailors. Comment by Lourdie Powell: Re-motivation meets 3PC.
Use lowercase for naval.
U.S. Navy Style Guide page 10.

C.
Closing Sentence:
Customs and traditions represent a form of the culture for the Navy. Senior Enlisted Leaders have a responsibility for knowing such culture and how it remains an important piece to naval history and heritage. Comment by Lourdie Powell: Weak closing. End with a thought-provoking question or idea – or a quote from someone of importance or expertise that supports the information outlined in the paper.

References Comment by Lourdie Powell: Below are some guidelines/resources I hope you will use as you prepare your draft essay.
References (own page, centered on 1st line, bold):
List sources in alphabetical order and double spaced.
Use a hanging indent (.5 inch from the left margin) for each reference.
Author’s names are inverted; give last names and initials for all work authors unless the work has more than 20 authors.
For in-text citations, the punctuation follows the citation.
Each reference entry requires an in-text citation (and vice versa).
Reference Page Resources:
St. Catherine University Libraries APA 7th Ed. Quick Guide
http://library.stkate.edu/assets/library-uploads/files/citeAPA7th

https://apastyle.apa.org/style-grammar-guidelines/references/elements-list-entry

(n.d.). Retrieved from https://en.m.wikipedia.org/wiki/Manning_the_rail
(n.d.). Retrieved from https://usnhistory.navylive.dodlive.mil/2016/10/03/manning-the-rails-a-navy-tradition/
(n.d.). Retrieved from https://www.history.navy.mil/news-and-events/multimedia-gallery/infographics/heritage/manning-the-rail–.html
(n.d.). Retrieved from https://visitpearlharbor.org/naval-terminology-manning-the-rail/
Unknown. (2002). Basic Military Requirments NAVEDTRA 14325.