4 pages of Draft. Then after the feedback, i will upload to waypoint and get the feedback,then after you need to summarize the feedback in 400 words. 

Purpose: The primary goal of this weekly assignment is to enable you to understand the revision process and revise your paper with the help of a writing specialist.

Prepare:

Step 1: Prepare a shortened version of your Final Paper (at least four pages) by including the following:

• Introduction paragraph and thesis statement you developed for your Week 3 Assignment.
• Background information of the global societal issue you have chosen.
• Brief argument supporting at least two solutions to the global societal issue.
• Conclusion paragraph.
• Must document any information used from at least five scholarly sources in APA style as outlined in the Ashford Writing Center’s Citing Within Your Paper (Links to an external site.) Note that you will need at least eight scholarly sources for your Final Paper in Week 5.

Step 2: After you have completed a rough draft of your paper, submit that draft to the Ashford Writing Center by using the instructions found in the

Paper Review (Links to an external site.)

page. Your paper will be returned within 24 hours, so give yourself enough time to complete and submit it prior to the due date.

Reflect: Carefully review the revision letter and the margin comments that you see on your returned paper. Consider each of the suggestions provided to help you to revise your paper.

Write:

What You Need to Submit to Waypoint:

• Upload the PDF document that contains the feedback from the Writing Center specialist.
• Submit the journal assignment answering the following questions in at least 400 words:

  Identify the top three issues your writing specialist focused on in your rough draft (e.g., paragraph structure, proper use of quotations, thesis statement, etc.).

  In what ways were those issues surprising?

  Describe what you learned from some of the feedback your writing specialist provided as explanations.

  Was this feedback helpful?

  Evaluate the usefulness of the paper review tool.

  In what ways did this activity improve your academic writing skills?
  Will you use the Ashford Writing Center to review your work in the future? Why or why not?

  Identify Writing Center Video Tutorials (Links to an external site.) that you find most useful and explain why. Also, identify tutorial(s) you found least useful and explain why.

The journal part of the assignment does not need to be formatted in APA style; however, correct grammar, spelling, and punctuation is required.

Carefully review the

Grading Rubric (Links to an external site.)

for the criteria that will be used to evaluate your journal.

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Paper Title:

No. of Pages: 0

Paper Style: APA Paper Type: N/A

Taken English? Yes English as Second Language? No

Feedback Areas: General, N/A

Paper Goals: Prepare: Step 1: Prepare a shortened version of your Final Paper (at least four

pages) by including the following: Introduction paragraph and thesis statement

you developed for your Week 3 Assignment. Background information of the global

societal issue you have chosen. Brief argument supporting at

Proofing Summary:

Hi Casey,

I’m AJ, your composition tutor for the Writing Center. I have reviewed your submission and have several suggestions that will help you

revise. Please feel free to contact us through a 24/7 live writing session with any follow-up questions or for any clarification.

Below, you will find a revision plan along with margin comments within your paper. Use my suggestions as a starting point for the

revision process. Also, please note that I have not edited or proofread the entire draft for minor errors, but rather, focused on overall

concerns such as idea development.

This is a good start to your essay on global drug trade and trafficking. I thought you did a great job with immediately stating the

purpose of this paper and sticking to the overall theme of this purpose throughout the entirety of this assignment. In addition to this,

you also did very well in your efforts to ensure that the information in this paper was delivered in a highly organized fashion.

For your revisions, I suggest focusing on:

1. You have not yet addressed all of the items in the prompt. This prompt is a complicated one, to be sure. If you carefully break down

the prompt, you will see that it is asking for you to:

• discuss the problem,

• propose a solution to the problem,

• evaluate the validity, reliability, and biases of the sources you used in addition to pointing out where more research is needed, and

• show ethical implications of your proposed solution.

Please review the sample paper found in your course to help you to better understand the expectations of this assignment and to

complete all of the necessary sections.

When reviewing this sample paper, I would suggest paying extra attention to the level headings and the specific titles they used for

these headings. Consider using these level headings as a template for how you should organize them.

2. The introduction paragraph should end with a thesis statement that includes the societal problem, your proposed solution to the

societal problem and also the positive/negative ethical outcome of the solution. Consider following this format for your thesis: (Your

issue) should/should not ____. Instead, we should (insert your solutions to the problem). These solutions create (insert the positive

and negative ethical implications).

3. Develop your paragraphs more. In general, all paragraphs need to have 3 pieces:

P-Point—also known as your topic sentence where you state what the paragraph is about

I-Information—where you present your information (facts, details, quotes, and reasons)

E-Explanation—where you explain the relevance or importance of your information. Specifically for this essay, you should focus on

developing this part of your paragraphs. You did very well with making sure you used a strong amount of information, but now you

should work on supplementing your information with more personal analysis in your own words that explains the significance of your

information. Please be sure to do all of this when writing your paragraphs. For help with this, click here:

http://writingcenter.ashford.edu/body-paragraphs

Good luck in the course, and I hope we can help you with your next assignment.

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For more help with formatting your title page and running header click here:

http://writingcenter.ashford.edu/introduction-apa

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Make sure you are ending your

introduction with a clear thesis that

states the overall purpose of your

paper, and provides a general

introduction to the topics of your

following body paragraphs.

Keep in mind that this paper should be

organized into sections via level

headings. Consider reviewing the

template for this assignment to ensure

that you have addressed everything that

was required from you for this paper.

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Make sure you are citing all of your

sources in proper APA style.

For more help with in-text citations, use this guide: http://writingcenter.ashford.edu/citing-within-your-paper

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You do a great job of using plenty of citations

from scholarly resources in this section of

your paper, but you should consider

supplementing these citations with more

analysis in your own words to properly explain

the significance of these citations.

You do a good job here summarizing your

thoughts with your final sentence, but you

might consider adding a part to this sentence

that gives a general introduction to the topic of

the next paragraph.

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Consider developing your ideas in this paragraph to a greater extent. Keep in mind that all of your paragraphs should be

around 7-11 sentences in length. For help with this, click here:

http://writingcenter.ashford.edu/body-paragraphs

This is a good start to your conclusion, but

keep in mind your conclusion should

somewhat resemble your introduction

paragraph. It should summarize all the

thoughts brought up in this paper, restate

your thesis, and leave the reader with one

last memorable statement.

For your final draft, make sure that

you include sections in this essay

that cover your , the ethical

implications of your proposed

solution, and an evaluation of your

sources. Both of these sections are

necessary to complete this assignment.

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For help formatting your references page, click here: http://writingcenter.ashford.edu/format-your-reference-list

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